Many types of animals have gradually become domesticated and have been taken into our homes as pets. Pets are enjoyed by young and old , but are they really worth having ?. Actually, I'm in a neutral position between owing a pet or not.
In the beginning, pets are great companies for those who live alone, such as the elderly . Also, having a dog around the house can give you a greater sense of security. In addition, Keeping a pet is an important part of every child’s childhood and plays a big role in both his physical and mental development. It teaches children how to play, and be careful, while at the same time raising tolerance and understanding of each other. For instance, birds through their singing add some sense of peace and fun to the child's mentality. Not to mention the fact that keeping a pet makes fun for people who are crazy about attending various animals’ exhibitions and showing the best points of their pets to others. In particular, fish with their colorful shapes and different types are favorable for many people.
However, bringing a pet isn't a decision to be taken lightly. There are some expenses involved as animals need food , special cages, equipment and occasional veterinary treatment which may be expensive. Apart from this , they need care and attention on a daily basis, which can be time-consuming.It can be argued that some people can’t keep pets because of their health. Usually they are allergies and can not live with a pet in the same place. For example, cats may bring itching for those with high allergy.
Taking everything into account , buying a pet should be a carefully planned decision .If you are fully aware of your pet's need and all the responsibilities involved in owing one, then having a pet can be a very rewarding experience.
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1. Pets are enjoyed by young and old alike,(wrong structure, rewrite again) but are they really worth having or are there too many drawbacks?.
2. To start with(in the beginning), pets are great companies for those who live alone, such as the elderly . What is more(Also), having a dog around the house can give you a
3. in both their (his) physical and mental development. It teaches children how to play, look after them(who are them???), while at the same time aiding (raising)tolerance and understanding
4. mention the fact that it (who is it???)makes fun for people who are crazy about attending various animals’ exhibitions and showing the best points of their pets to others. In particular, fishes (fish i)with their colourful shapes and different types are favorable (and )for many people.
5. treatment which can(may) be costly(expensive). Apart from this , they need care and attention on a daily basis, which can be time-consuming.It can be argued that some people can’t
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